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Tuesday 15 September 2015

The Market Day

Walt: write an interesting and detailed recount.


Have you ever Had a Market Day at your School Or Class Room before? Well Team 4 did. Read on to find out more about the Market Day.
The reason Why we are having our Marking Day because our topic is Trade and Enterprise. Also because we have been Making product for the past few weeks. I was In custom Stationery Group. Me and my Business Partners Waimaria, Patricia and Aliyah were Making Name Labels For Netbook, or Tot Trays.
The Market had Started everyone was so Happy. Me, Waimaria and Aliyah at the same time we were Delivering and Buying. As i walked Pass I saw all the other product Like Candles, Soap, Loom Bands and More. I saw a Ice Block in a cup that the Kitchen people made. s i walked past and Thought should I buy it and I did.
I Offered to do all the Delivering. We only Had 1 Hour Left to go and still didn't Deliver I Tried my Best to look for the People that ordered our name labels. I saw Aliyah and ask her to help me, We did it together and had Heaps of Pts.
My Highlights about the Market was when we Delivered the name labels  Just in time. My Feelings about the Markets is everyone had enjoyed it.

Recount Writing

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Write for my reader
I've tried to think about my reader
My writing shows some awareness of reader because my writing is quite clear and I have tried to interest my reader.
My writing is easy to understand and I have tried to tell the reader what it was like to be there by giving details and my thoughts.
My writing really considers audience as reader because I have kept their interest and made them feel like they know exactly what it was like for me.
Purpose
I tried to meet the purpose
My text goes some way towards meeting the purpose
The message is clear in some parts of the recount.
My text fully meets the purpose.
The message is clear all through the recount.
Introduction
My introduction does not yet clearly orientate or hook in my reader.
My introduction gets some buy in from audience and they can understand what I am going to write about.
My introduction hooks in my reader and it is clear what I am writing about.
My introduction wows my reader!
Paragraph Topics
My paragraphs are confused and don't follow my plan.
I have tried to follow my plan.
Most my paragraphs are about 1 big idea and I have added some detail.
My paragraphs have some complex as well as simple sentences. Post paragraphs give details about 1 big idea.
I have followed the paragraph topic in my plan.
My paragraphs have complex and simple sentences. Paragraphs all give details about 1 big idea.

This Morning our task was to write a recount about what happened on Friday

The WALT is Our WALT is write an interesting and detailed recount.
Hope you enjoy my Writng.

2 comments:

  1. Hi Sulieti,
    I really enjoyed reading your story about your market day. Did you really make Netbook labels? Thats cool! I loved the word choice you used, but maybe you could try and figure out where to put the capitals and fullstops. Other then that, everything else was great! Keep up the awesome work! :)

    Kat

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